Ryan Gaboury
English 110 C
Professor Emerson
7 December 2017
Framing Statement
Part I: In my paper, I knew that not only did I need length but my main focus was to clarify what the sole purpose was behind my paper and the vision that I wanted it to convey. My overall practice was to place each individual opening statement to each paragraph and compare it to my thesis. I was ask myself a few questions such as, “Does this connect to my thesis, Does this give a pathway into a deeper understanding or meaning, and Will this topic end up benefiting my paper or it is necessary to include this specific topic.” I then was to take my opening statements to each paragraph and see if my thesis was truly connected to all of them and if it overarched the main theme within the paper that was to come. This was in fact the most important process to the development of my paper since I told myself if I could just simply get to a place where the thesis and first sentence from each paragraph matched what I wanted to talk about, I could easily expand my ideas from there. I also focused mainly on cutting down on my paragraph’s length since prior to this paper, my paragraph’s were at least a page long and I was losing the reader. I needed to cut down on over explaining and emphasizing on irrelevant facts to my main ideas and thesis.
Part II: I believe that this Learning Outcome is in fact a strong point in my writing. It is easy for me to understand other people’s writing from my perspective and some how understand and convey their deeper messages. I can then see who and what they are trying to do with the piece that they have created and then summarize them overall within my paper when I am to either introduce them or a piece from their own paper. In my second writing piece I introduced Thomas King in a way that I understood him through his writing stating, “Preventing young children or the younger generations from accessing technology can help to protect their already innocent minds. Thomas King, an entrepreneur who advocates for the societal change in “20-Something’s” stated in his TEDx presentation “Adults, We Need to Have The Talk,” “Having access to an abundance of knowledge is exciting, but also exposes the shadows in our society… a population who, let’s be honest, are mostly in debt, dispassionate about their work and in a state of physical and mental dis-ease” (3).” Before using a quote from his piece, I wanted to introduce him so my reader would understand who he was as a person before they understood the reason behind including a quote from his work. I believe that it was easy in finding a solid example that would benefit my paper since Thomas King was so knowledgable and opinionated towards this subject. Using this specific quote let readers understand his view, yet also take into the consideration the negative lasting effects that our population is going to endure and continue to struggle with. This integration was simple since my paper was talking towards how people have the attention spans of almost nothing so for him who is an advocate for the technological era to say that people are “in a state of physical and mental dis-ease” clearly exposed his argument in a sense and benefited mine greatly. Sources are a great way to show not only support towards your ideas but also a sense that you understand different perspectives and views of others.
Part III: Citations at first were some sort of challenge since I didn’t fully understand how or why you could easily leave out a persons last name after a quote if you simply identified them prior. This small, yet easy transition and learning experience in fact benefited me in the long run. I understood that once someone has been introduced, there is no need to overuse their name because again they had already been introduced and overkill was clearly no longer needed. Given that I had grown up with MLA formatting in high school, I understood how to cite something exceptionally using the specific format since my teachers would further doc me points if I had not used it correctly. I believe at some point though, I truly needed to understand how to control my run-on sentences and by performing that short sentences exercise through our class work, I was able to realize that I truthfully had an issue with cutting sentences short for my own benefits. For example, I bet within this entire article that I have written above and soon to be below, it will be a very simple task to find plenty of run-on sentences as I still clearly struggle with the issue. To help fix it, I focus on preventing myself from getting carried away and simply cut off my ideas until the next sentence. This issue is clearly still a work in progress but I am optimistic that some day, I will conquer the sentences.
Part IIII: At first, I was never exactly strong at looking through an individual’s piece and truly understanding what they were trying to convey or how I could use my input to further benefit their grade or writing piece. I know this is very contradictory to what I have stated prior since I am very strong at analyzing pieces that are given by assignment but I just never truly understood how to make others better, just rather what they were trying to get at and their meaning behind it. I believe that I have taken leaps and bounds in this Learning Outcome given that I truly did little to no reviews when I would look at someone’s paper in the past. Now, I at least can identify small or overarching issues within a piece especially if they are a rough draft because something’s are very obvious such as grammar, punctuation, and your typical errors. But further then that, I believe that I can identify potential issues that the paper will have down the road and through a person’s thesis and opening statements, I can identify if they are on the right track or those need to be tweaked first. If not, then I will make my way through each individual paragraph to identify issues that range from summarizing, lack of quotes, connection to thesis, or a lack of analysis. This process I have formulated has changed the way I look and read specific pieces that I am given and my peer review has really improved, just look at my Marked First Draft . 🙂
