Ryan Gaboury
English 110 C
Professor Emerson
14 November 2017
Revision Strategy
I believe that it is most important thing to do is create a solid thesis. My thesis needs to truly connect to the prompt and what my overall message is going to be throughout the paper. Without this, my paper is dead to all of its readers in which exists at the moment. Once I am able to create a quality thesis, I need to make sure that I connect back to it throughout the paper so that it is credible and backed by the evidence provided. I also need to organize my writing style, rather I believe that in some areas it is too sloppy and jumps around from point to point instead of sticking to the main argument and ideas. This is a much easier fix but can clarify and strengthen important points that I need as a writer to stick and truly sway them. In addition, I believe it is important to not overstate my points to where I lose my credibility. The Bandwagon Effect is definitely an important part to my paper, but I can’t go too far without ranting on the subject. Lastly, I think I could add something extra or a twist to make it complete.
