Ryan Gaboury
English 110 C
Professor Emerson
14 October 2017
Learning Outcome 1
My approach to this first formal writing assignment was, to say the least, lackluster and unresponsive. In order for my paper’s to grow and gain conviction over the reader, I need to understand and control what the true vision and purpose I have behind the paper. My revision process in this first draft did not lead to many changes structurally which in the long run ended up killing my overall score. I had or should have used the advice from Professor Emerson to place my main ideas or opinions, strong statements, at the beginning of each individual paragraph to drop an overall umbrella over the paragraph. In turn, it would then connect back to the thesis and connect together using textual evidence as support. In order to approach writing a paper the correct way, I need to take the recursive writing process as an actual process and use all the advice and tools given to me. Global revision will derive from placing an overall position statement at the beginning of paragraphs to then branch out and create a solid model to represent the argument. Local revision will come from the help of others as well as myself since I tend to stretch sentences and use an excess amount of commas to compensate for it. My biggest goal is to place myself in a better position and use my new writing strategy (Formation of Paragraphs) to my advantage.
