Ryan Gaboury
English 110 C
Professor Emerson
15 October 2017
Learning Outcomes
The largest pattern I have noticed from my own personal writing has been the elongation of sentences as well as the overdoing of paragraph’s. My paragraph’s are struggling in the wrong length category as I am including too much detail or reaching outside of the umbrella within the same paragraph. Also, I elongate sentences to a point where they lose the readers focus and aren’t as authentic and justifiable as possible. A well-written, clear paper is a huge goal of mine as my profession in real life requires the use of correct language and proper writing. I believe that the most necessary fix to my paper is the structure of paragraph’s by placing umbrella statements that can further my argument and help to set up whether I back my opinions with a summary or textual evidence. Also, I would like to keep my paragraph’s to short and concise to not lose the reader and help my opinion become as strong as possible.
